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I answered the Pink Flamingo prompt, but I could have added more to the beginning of the thesis. I did not really explain my point until the end of the essay. My thesis was there, but it was not as clear as it could have been. My paragraphs were linked, but my transitions were a little off. I think I tried to cover too many ideas, so I was not able to develop all of my ideas as fully as possible. I feel that I included a lot of details and quotes to support my analysis.

I felt more organized during this timed write because I had the experience from the Rodriguez essay "under my belt". My thesis did not go well, so if I had the chance to revise this, I would work more on what my essay would actually be about. If given more time, I would change my essay to incorporate a better-thought-out thesis. The organization went mostly according to plan, but as I wrote it, I changed some of the structure here and there to make the language more vivid. As I wrote the essay, I began to understand more of what the author was trying to say. I saw her point of view more clearly as I wrote this essay. If I had to write a timed essay tomorrow, I would try to organize my thoughts on another sheet of paper before beginning the writing process.