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Upon entering the class, I've become more aware of how I write almost every time I pick up a pencil. Since August, my writing has changed because I've noticed I've used a more mature voice. I've written with a more formal attitude about my topic, and I haven't used casual sentences. My writing has stayed the same since the beginning of the class by always needing improvement. I am very critical of my work, and almost always feel like I need to add just something to improve it. As a writer, my strengths have almost always concerned grammar, punctuation, and spelling. I read everything I write to myself in my head first, and once more after I write it. If there is a sentence that sounds odd, I take another look at it to see what I can fix about it. However, I still see a weakness of it being too basic. I have not strayed from my "comfort zone" as a writer, and I feel that I need to take a little risk with my writing to improve it. I plan on using more action in my writing to make my words stronger.

If I had time to write another draft of my definition essay, I would organize my ideas and put more thought into making the essay flow more smoothly. I rushed through the essay, and I feel that if I had the opportunity to fix it, I would be able to produce a better essay if given more time. Unfortunately, my essay was not read and given peer feedback. However, I am still revising the essay because I was not satisfied with my grade. So far, my biggest problem is organizing my thoughts to flow smoothly.

So far, through my revision, my biggest success has been a thorough organization of an outline of my topic. I've listed what points I want to keep in the essay and what points I felt pulled me away from my topic. So far, my narrative, descriptive and illustrated elements are not combined all into one, but they are in the essay separately. My best success considering audience is that I understand that not everyone in my audience is as familiar with my topic as I am, so I am careful not to go into a description that will be difficult for an average person to understand.

I was intimidated by the fact that it was the first major AP English essay. In my sophomore English class, my teacher let us read some essays that his AP students wrote, and some of the essays really impressed me! I was always unsure of whether or not my essays could come out as impressive as those did. As we studied methods in class, I was influenced to use more vivid language in my essay, since normally my essays are very bland with a lot of boring simple sentences. After hearing some student examples, I wanted to try to incorporate a story into my essay, which I will hopefully accomplish in my revision. My peers also helped a lot when I asked them if my essay was "good or not". Most of the time, they said that I wrote such a good essay, but they are also my friends. The best advice I received was for me to slow down my writing because it sounded like it rushed too much to get to the point. After completing this writing assignment, I feel that I have grown as a writer, but there are still many writing techniques to learn and incorporate into my essays to come!